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제가 진주목걸이에 대한 묘사글을 썼는데요,,, 빨간 부분이 선생님께서 고치라고 표시해놓은부분인데 도저히 전 이해가 잘 안되구모르겠네요..ㅠㅠA pearl necklace is composed of pearls of different size, a fishing gut and a pair of silver hooks. Length of the piece of pearl necklace is 43cm, about per 1cm for the hooks which are the end of the necklace, and 41cm for the pearls. The pearls are organized of 65% oval pearls which are shaped irregularly and 35% circular pearls shaped about 7mm long ,and 7mm high with regular size pearls. In addition, the pearls have ivory color on the whole with quiet gloss. These pearls are strung the fishing gut, so that the fishing gut is not exposed.Inside the pearl necklace is the fishing gut, which is very thin and tough. It is hardly snapped( 거의 안끊어진다고 설명하고 싶었어요)because this is a kind of synthetic.Moreover, it is transparent not to stick out. In other word, the pearl necklace should look like composing of the pearls for its beauty. Finally, the end of the necklace is hooked by a pair of silver hooks with a hook shaped one and a round one. The hook shaped( the hookwhich shaped 이건데요 줄여서 저렇게 써도 되는거아닌가용? ㅠㅠ)one hooks the round hook. Therefore, the necklace can be connected and worn on a neck. In conclusion, quiet shiny ( 은은하게 반짝인다는 뜻으로 썼어요) pearls with various size, the transparent fishing gut inside the pearls and a pair of silver hooks are made up of a worth pearl necklace.( 가치있는 진주목걸이)
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